What i needed to say V.1

Remember when..?

I can’t remember much
But what I remember is great
The way you said hello
Hand in hand-gently
Saying “now you be a good girl”
I’ll never forget
It always made me laugh
The way you would play me in checkers
You would always win
By a lot
The way you always took me with you
When you went fishing
You could fish for hours on end
And never get bored
Even if you only catch one fish
Those memories are faint
And the one’s I do remember?
There just as good
Even if you can’t go fishing anymore
You watch it on EPSN
I’ll watch it with you
When you’ve gotten to the age
Where you could be rude to people
Especially waiters and still get away with it
“Where the hell is my food? What did you do, go get married”
I will always remember that day
The waiter was speechless
While our whole table was laughing hysterically
I remember the last game of checkers we played
I won.
But only because you kept moving my pieces
And kept forgetting what color you were.
But I will always remember how you said hello
It never changed
Hand in hand-gently
“Now you be a good girl”
So I just wanted to say
Hi grandpa
I miss you

1. How can i make it have more emotion in it?
2. what else could i add?

a time my world (will) change; v.1

I've spent the last
15 years of my life
relying on friends and family

but in just a short while
that will all change
and i will be free

I can go where i want
with whoever i want, and
till whenever i want

no more relying
on my family and friends
i can depend on myself
without bothering anyone else

i guess when you think about it
i'm not that free

i wont be able to go very far
only one passenger at a time, and
i can't go anywhere past curfew

there goes my freedom

but.
when I get my license
its still going to be great

besides
i still need a car.

1. I think it should be longer, but i don't know what else to add?
2. what can I do to make it better?