What i needed to say V.1

Remember when..?

I can’t remember much
But what I remember is great
The way you said hello
Hand in hand-gently
Saying “now you be a good girl”
I’ll never forget
It always made me laugh
The way you would play me in checkers
You would always win
By a lot
The way you always took me with you
When you went fishing
You could fish for hours on end
And never get bored
Even if you only catch one fish
Those memories are faint
And the one’s I do remember?
There just as good
Even if you can’t go fishing anymore
You watch it on EPSN
I’ll watch it with you
When you’ve gotten to the age
Where you could be rude to people
Especially waiters and still get away with it
“Where the hell is my food? What did you do, go get married”
I will always remember that day
The waiter was speechless
While our whole table was laughing hysterically
I remember the last game of checkers we played
I won.
But only because you kept moving my pieces
And kept forgetting what color you were.
But I will always remember how you said hello
It never changed
Hand in hand-gently
“Now you be a good girl”
So I just wanted to say
Hi grandpa
I miss you

1. How can i make it have more emotion in it?
2. what else could i add?

a time my world (will) change; v.1

I've spent the last
15 years of my life
relying on friends and family

but in just a short while
that will all change
and i will be free

I can go where i want
with whoever i want, and
till whenever i want

no more relying
on my family and friends
i can depend on myself
without bothering anyone else

i guess when you think about it
i'm not that free

i wont be able to go very far
only one passenger at a time, and
i can't go anywhere past curfew

there goes my freedom

but.
when I get my license
its still going to be great

besides
i still need a car.

1. I think it should be longer, but i don't know what else to add?
2. what can I do to make it better?

[Jordan and Aiden decided it would be fun to go to a nice, romantic movie to celebrate their one year of being together. Just when they thought they had the whole theater to themselves they see a teenage girl walk in by herself. She quietly walks in and decided she should sit directly behind them.]

AIDEN
Happy one year, Jordan. I love you!

JORDAN
I love you too baby.

AIDEN
Not as much as i love you honey bun

JORDAN
But i love you more darling


AIDEN
Noo i love you more my little

TAYLOR
Ahhh get a room!


JORDAN
Mind your own business punk! Go sit somewhere else if we're bugging you that much.

TAYLOR
[Rolls eyes]
[Just then another teenage girl enters the theater.]

TAYLOR
AMY! AMY! OVER HERE! I'M OVER HERE! COME SIT OVER-

JORDAN
Will you shut up!? There’s three people in the whole frickin' theater. I think she can see you.

AIDEN
[Embarrassed] Jordan. Please just calm down. It’s not a big deal, just be quiet. Please?

[Just then another girl sprints in through the theater. She had no care in the world what anyone thought about her, and she didn’t care about anyone else either.] AMY
Taylor! I missed you! How have you been?

TAYLOR
Great! just fantastic, amazing! Except for the fact that these two love birds in front of her are pissing me off. Mainly the girl, she's so immature.

JORDAN
[Snaps around with anger] What the hell is your problem?

AIDEN
Jordan, please stop. Let it go, will ya?

AMY
Your right, she is a bit of a hot head. So immature.

[Movie theater lights dim and the previews begin]

TAYLOR
[Talking loudly]
This movie where about to watch, I think your really going to love it.

AMY
Really? Tell me what happened in the movie!

TAYLOR
Well in a nut shell, the guy who really loves her actually ends up dying. Then she realizes she loves him and feels terrible and wants to-

JORDAN
Excuse me?! Some people are trying to watch the-

AMY
The what? Previews? Yeah chill out dude, the movie hasn’t even started.

JORDAN
You just spoiled the whole entire movie, what’s your problem?

AMY
Well right now, you! So can you get off my case and shut the hell up?

AIDEN
Can’t we all just get along? Can’t you guys settle on a nice harmless compromise?

AMY
SHHHH! The movie is starting!

JORDAN
(Mumbles to herself)
Finally..
[The movie hadn’t been playing for more than a few minutes, until AMY realized it was a good time to start talking.]

AMY
Taylor, isn’t that the guy who ends up dying in the end?

TAYLOR
Umm, no, no that’s the guy who wants to tell her he loves her, but knows he can’t compete with the amazingly, gorgeous, handsome man.

AMY
That amazingly gorgeous handsome man looks like my ex boyfriend doesn’t he?

TAYLOR
Oh my god! Your right, he does! What ever happened to-

JORDAN
[Getting even more annoyed JORDAN turns around in her seat]
I swear to god, if you two don’t stop talking, I’m going to shove this straw so far up your-

AIDEN
Lots of love, lots of love, lots of love! JORDAN! Please calm down
[AIDEN turns around in his chair and whispers to the two girls]
I’m so sorry, she has a bit of an anger problem.

JORDAN
What the hell Aiden? Whose side are you on?

AIDEN
Yours babe, but seriously? Do you want to just move seats?

JORDAN
Hell no! We were here first, there’s no way I’m going to be the weaker link.

AMY
I happen to love where I’m sitting, how about you Taylor?

TAYLOR
Same here! It’s the perfect spot. I feel like we’re next to those grumpy old annoying neighbors we never you used to live by!

AMY
OH MY GOSH! You mean the ones who were totally obsessed with there yard?

TAYLOR
Yeah! Those ones, we would always go screw around with there yard and glue leaves to the yard. Haha

AMY
Yeah! Ah man, good times. And remember the time when-

JORDAN
OH MY GOD!
[JORDAN gets up, holding her slushy high in the air]
If you guys say one more thing to piss me off, this slushy is going right down your shirts!

AMY
You Wouldn’t!

JORDAN
Wouldn’t i?

TAYLOR
I don’t think you’ve got the guts

AMY
Me either! You’re a chicken!

TAYLOR
[Holds hands under arms and runs around in circles]
Buck, Buck, Buck, Buck! CHICKEN!

[JORDAN looks at the two girls, admiring the fact that they both look like complete idiots dancing like chickens]

TAYLOR
See? I knew you didn’t have it in you!

AMY
Hah! What a loser
TAYLOR
I know, right? I can’t believe that guy is actually dating her she’s a total-

[Just then AIDEN turns around in his seat and stands up. He snatches the slushy away from JORDAN]

JORDAN
What do you think your doing?

AIDEN
Something you were never going to do.

[Just then AIDEN takes JORDANS slushy and pours it all over the two girls]

AMY and TALOR
[Shrieking high pitched and loudly screaming]
Ahhhh!

AMY
My new shirt!

TAYLOR
My new shoes!

AIDEN
Now if you’ll excuse me, My girlfriend and I would like to enjoy the rest of the movie.

[AMY and TAYLOR, still in shock, just sit there, motionless.]

JORDAN
Aww I love you Aiden.

AIDEN
I love you too babe.





*QUESTION 1- What would be a good title for my play?

*QUESTION 2- what are some other ways Taylor and Amy can annoy Aiden and Jordan?